After getting some feedback on SHARRA'S WAR during WriteOnCon, I decided to make some changes to the story's beginning. It was something I had been considering, and the feedback I got was a confirmation for me that it needed to be done.
So, the other day I picked up my journal and started writing a new opening. I brought it with me when I went to pick my kids up from school and worked on it while I waited.
Enter Daughter #2.
I handed her my journal. "Here. Read the new beginning of SHARRA'S WAR."
She looked at me with this horrified expression and said, "Noooo!" as if I was about to cut off my left arm! She doesn't like it when I revise something that she thinks is "perfect." But she read it anyway. And when she got to the end of the new beginning, she said, "Scary." Not that the writing was scary, but that the last line was scary.
To me, her comment was a good thing. It meant that I got across what I was trying to get across.
I haven't gotten Sharra's new opening quite to where I want it to be yet. But when I do get there, I hope Daughter #2 won't need any more convincing.